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This took me a week and half to write for creative writing. What this is about is something that has changed me into who I am today.
Doors have been more than opened
They will never close
Ripped off the hinges
Leaving gaping holes
Walls have crumbled
Barriers broken
I have opened my eyes to narcotic logic
Overwhelming emotions unlike I've ever seen
My views of everything are ripping at the seams,
never to be stitched again
Just replaced with
all theses thoughts and emotions are fabrications of my mind
I have a vast understanding, the others are blind
Because of corruption, greed, and fear
I thought these feelings were forever
Minutes, hours pass, how is it still 11:48
Sitting there in my mind, only I am to bate(Shakespeare word for argue)
About things that cannot be explained
Our answers just ask more questions
I cannot sleep, time won't stop moving
At the same time it's frozen still
I lay my head, close my eyes
All I can see are pasterns and shapes
I get up to eat
My smell has become my taste
So far I've been peaking behind the curtain
Waiting for the show to begin
As I take my place the show begins
I get my turn in the spotlight, then it passes
Onto another to speak their mind
All my life I have been peaking and sneaking,
around to the other sides
Now I have the strength and logic to open doors,
tare down walls, and break these barriers,
only for the next generation to stack the stones,
close the doors, raise their shields.
The wall is rebuilt, the doors are shut
The Barriers are up
The fools locked themselves out
They locked me in with all this knowledge
Doors have been more than opened
They will never close
Ripped off the hinges
Leaving gaping holes
Walls have crumbled
Barriers broken
I have opened my eyes to narcotic logic
Overwhelming emotions unlike I've ever seen
My views of everything are ripping at the seams,
never to be stitched again
Just replaced with
all theses thoughts and emotions are fabrications of my mind
I have a vast understanding, the others are blind
Because of corruption, greed, and fear
I thought these feelings were forever
Minutes, hours pass, how is it still 11:48
Sitting there in my mind, only I am to bate(Shakespeare word for argue)
About things that cannot be explained
Our answers just ask more questions
I cannot sleep, time won't stop moving
At the same time it's frozen still
I lay my head, close my eyes
All I can see are pasterns and shapes
I get up to eat
My smell has become my taste
So far I've been peaking behind the curtain
Waiting for the show to begin
As I take my place the show begins
I get my turn in the spotlight, then it passes
Onto another to speak their mind
All my life I have been peaking and sneaking,
around to the other sides
Now I have the strength and logic to open doors,
tare down walls, and break these barriers,
only for the next generation to stack the stones,
close the doors, raise their shields.
The wall is rebuilt, the doors are shut
The Barriers are up
The fools locked themselves out
They locked me in with all this knowledge
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+1 one of your best, if not, your best! thanks for sharing Ken, your writing force is strong.
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That was awesome Ken, I love the imagery and what you have to say. We all have doors that either need to be open or closed, torn down or boarded up. Things that we need to show the world and things that we wish to hide. Reminds me of lyrics to a song,
"When we grew up and went to school, there were certain teachers who would hurt the children anyway they could
by pouring their derision upon anything we did
exposing every weakness however carefully hidden by the kids.
But in the town it was well known that when they got home at night
their fat and psychopathic wives
Would thrash them within inches of their lives!
ooooooooooooo, oooooooo, ooooooooooo, ooooooooo, ooooooooo, ooooooooo,oooo.
We don't need no education
We don’t need no thought control
No dark sarcasm in the classroom
Teachers leave them kids alone
Hey! Teacher! Leave them kids alone!
All in all it's just another brick in the wall.
All in all you're just another brick in the wall."
I know it is nothing close to what you said but the imagery is there and the feelings are just as strong.
Thanks again Ken!!!!
"When we grew up and went to school, there were certain teachers who would hurt the children anyway they could
by pouring their derision upon anything we did
exposing every weakness however carefully hidden by the kids.
But in the town it was well known that when they got home at night
their fat and psychopathic wives
Would thrash them within inches of their lives!
ooooooooooooo, oooooooo, ooooooooooo, ooooooooo, ooooooooo, ooooooooo,oooo.
We don't need no education
We don’t need no thought control
No dark sarcasm in the classroom
Teachers leave them kids alone
Hey! Teacher! Leave them kids alone!
All in all it's just another brick in the wall.
All in all you're just another brick in the wall."
I know it is nothing close to what you said but the imagery is there and the feelings are just as strong.
Thanks again Ken!!!!
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@Gface: Thanks man I really liked this one a lot too
@ Peaty: You kind of blended Happiest Days of our Lives with Another Brick in The Wall. XD
But yeah Pink Floyd is probably my favorite band so they inspire a lot of things for me. But this isn't meaning the same this is about how we can tear down walls and the next generation puts them up.
Thanks for the input
@ Peaty: You kind of blended Happiest Days of our Lives with Another Brick in The Wall. XD
But yeah Pink Floyd is probably my favorite band so they inspire a lot of things for me. But this isn't meaning the same this is about how we can tear down walls and the next generation puts them up.
Thanks for the input
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@Ken - your work has been featured on the preview page for Creative Writing
I always look forward to reading more of your work and I'm hoping that your writing will take you far in life
I always look forward to reading more of your work and I'm hoping that your writing will take you far in life
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Almost 6 months later, I wrote another poem taking this poem's main idea and feeling and wrote a part two. This poem help make me who I am today so I wrote another one 1/2 a year later to reflect on who I was, who I am, and who I am become.
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You're a god in peosy. I love your writing style. I'll try to write a real complet peom like you and share it.
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@ken - was this other poem 'the letters to god iii' ?
I just read it and gave you a + = <3
I like that, who you were and who you have become.
It's good to reflect on past work, knowing that you have developed more in your skills.
@nuka_bubble - looking forward to it
I just read it and gave you a + = <3
I like that, who you were and who you have become.
It's good to reflect on past work, knowing that you have developed more in your skills.
@nuka_bubble - looking forward to it
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I have a huge poem to come! 2 loose-leaf peppers for the moment.
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